No personal blog crapola.
Just one guy's quest to unlock the mysterious art of storytelling on screen.

Saturday, October 08, 2011

The Old Man and the Scene: Cat in the Rain

It was raining. The rain dripped from the palm trees. Water stood in pools on the gravel paths. The sea broke in a long line in the rain and slipped back down the beach to come up and break again in a long line in the rain.
Let's scriptify Hemmingway.
Beach - Day
RAIN. Dripping from the palm trees. Water stands in pools on the gravel paths. The sea breaks in a long line in the rain and slips back down the beach to come up and break again in a long line in the rain.
Hell yes. Subject, verb (five strong ones), object. At least three distinct, vivid shots suggested. Look at the lengthening sentences. There's your shot pacing. And a final sentence that unfolds exactly like the action it describes.